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Post by joeinthebox on Thu Jul 30, 2009 10:16 pm

Makorta betrayed the space marines on his first battle while he was a scout, his unit of scouts were ambushed by chaos and ordered to slaughter each of other for the amusement of the deamon prince of Malal. Without hesitation Makorta hacked down his allies while their backs were turned. He quickly became a favourite of the prince and earned himself the nickname Makorta the Traitor. Several campaigns later he found the squad he was in charge of cut down by a squad of pariahs while on patrol. When he knew that he had no chance he quickly surrendered and the pariahs "escorted" him to the monolith. The Necrons had invaded the planet to secure him, as he was a physic blank (the people necrons turn into pariahs and are very rare). However the planet was securely controlled by the chaos and the necrons were suffering heavy casualties. When the monolith came under attack by a defiler during the process of converting him, plans had to be rushed and he was equipped with most of his chaos equipment (helmet, backpack, powersword, shoulder pads and grenades) due to lack of resources. Though this pariah was imperfect he was more powerful and still retained a slightly larger amount of humanity than most pariahs. This made him even more deadly and he over came the defiler with little help from the monolith. makorta the traitor no longer has a nickname and is barely noticed among the lifeless hordes. Those who have met him do not live to tell the tale. With his soul broken and his body destroyed, he has betrayed an army for the last time.


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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by Disposable-hero on Mon Aug 03, 2009 5:46 pm

good story, but i recon that sounds more like a slaanesh's daemon, not nurgle... possibly khorne, though khorne would hate him fo becoming necron, because necrons don't bleed
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Tue Aug 04, 2009 2:22 pm

thanks =]
n yeah am not an expert on the chaos demons really...
n i dont spose any chaos deamon would be happy he'd betrayed them lol
they arent the most understanding and patient peoples
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by Spiritcurse on Wed Aug 05, 2009 2:09 pm

Tzeentch might appreciate the betrayal side of it...
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by Disposable-hero on Wed Aug 05, 2009 2:52 pm

changing sides and what not
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Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:34 pm

lol cos tht dnt play a large part in the background story
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Post by Disposable-hero on Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:38 pm

nope not at all XD
but only him, slaanesh, or posibly malal if you want to use things removed from the stories for copyright reasons (as i do XD)
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Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:44 pm

erm i dno just pick a gd deamon so i can edit the story lol
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Post by Disposable-hero on Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:48 pm

personally... i'd go for malal,
a god to represent chaos self destructive and traitorous nature
or tzeench, to change his heart,
i cant tell you which one to chose, but those are both good choices
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:57 pm

it is done (wind blowing noises)
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Post by Disposable-hero on Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:00 pm

oh no! thats the wind of change, (checks box of warhammer)
shit...
iasar has turned into a spawn, again, useless piece of crap XD
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Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:19 pm

dont worry, the wind of change has changed the wind of change..
so now the wind of change is a grot who doesnt change much
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Post by patrickspud on Wed Aug 05, 2009 10:20 pm

[quote="joeinthebox"]Makorta betrayed the space marines on his first battle while he was a scout, his unit of scouts were ambushed by chaos and ordered to slaughter each of other for the amusement of the deamon prince of Malal. Without hesitation Makorta hacked down his allies while their backs were turned. He quickly became a favourite of the prince and earned himself the nickname Makorta the Traitor. Several campaigns later he found the squad he was in charge of cut down by a squad of pariahs while on patrol. When he knew that he had no chance he quickly surrendered and the pariahs "escorted" him to the monolith. The Necrons had invaded the planet to secure him, as he was a physic blank (the people necrons turn into pariahs and are very rare). However the planet was securely controlled by the chaos and the necrons were suffering heavy casualties. When the monolith came under attack by a defiler during the process of converting him, plans had to be rushed and he was equipped with most of his chaos equipment (helmet, backpack, powersword, shoulder pads and grenades) due to lack of resources. Though this pariah was imperfect he was more powerful and still retained a slightly larger amount of humanity than most pariahs. This made him even more deadly and he over came the defiler with little help from the monolith. makorta the traitor no longer has a nickname and is barely noticed among the lifeless hordes. Those who have met him do not live to tell the tale. With his soul broken and his body destroyed, he has betrayed an army for the last time.[/quote]

asome story joe funny how the only reason that u made that man is beacose i lost a necron warriors head
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 10:26 pm

lol yeah thts the real background story
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by Spiritcurse on Wed Aug 05, 2009 11:27 pm

The grot has been changed into a spawn!
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Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 11:29 pm

then the spawn turns in2 wind of change, fulfilling the prohpecy of wind n such
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Post by Spiritcurse on Wed Aug 05, 2009 11:36 pm

I believe more things should become spawns. Make life more fun. Might end some posts with "................. SPAWN!"
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Wed Aug 05, 2009 11:51 pm

lol
my favourite things out of practicly the whole of warhammer 4 comedy value is those ork rokits with the smileys faces on the front
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Post by patrickspud on Wed Aug 05, 2009 11:58 pm

lol te he te he
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Post by Spiritcurse on Thu Aug 06, 2009 2:01 am

Mine are probably the various memes, the commissar *blam* one being one of the best. Other than that, it would have to be the irony of the human race still being alive.
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Post by joeinthebox on Thu Aug 06, 2009 11:10 am

hehe yeah i love being able to kill your own men, esppecialy on mods where u get shit loads instantly
like you say "Commissars. When there's something scary at the front, put something scarier at the back."
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Post by Spiritcurse on Fri Aug 07, 2009 1:39 pm

Yep, commissars have the virtue of being shit-scary, and as good a shot as a platoon commander, or even a sniper for that matter.
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Post by joeinthebox on Fri Aug 07, 2009 7:38 pm

the commisar has changed in2 a spawn
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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Tue Aug 18, 2009 11:51 pm

seein as this is a post about him i figured tht now i can i should put up a pic of makorta (not so keen on the name but cant think of a better 1)



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Re: Makorta The Traitor

Post by joeinthebox on Tue Aug 18, 2009 11:55 pm

bcos the picture is crap i think it needs explainin
ther is a necron symbol transfer on the sword and blad of th gun
and i used beads from that weird arty shop in glossop n glued em to the jetpack
also the thing on his leg is a grenade pouch and a pistol pouch, th ones you get 4 chaos/space marines
figured why hav one when you can have both
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